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The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh city newspaper:
Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
My response:
In the newspaper article above the author has presented an argument that claims that in the coming decade he expects a number of jobs to be added in the field of college education. The evidence he presented is that there is a pool of candidates who will reach the age of college education in the coming 10 years. The claim although looks sound at the first glance has a number of unsubstantiated assumptions as well as lack of justifications that becomes clear once we dive deeper into the matter.
First, the author assumes that for an individual, reaching college age inevitably leads to get admitted in college without any data regarding the rate of admission among the eligible candidates in the Waymarsh city. What if the rate of college admission that has been recorded in the past decades stands merely at 25% and shows a declining trend, which can be expected form a not so promising job market. Definitely, we can not expect a huge number of students to admit in colleges in the coming decade.
Second, there may be other reasons to the dearth of college education jobs in Waymarsh city, such as, a huge pool of accomplished teachers have already been employed in such positions. Now, even if there is an increase in number of students, may be, already established teachers will be able to handle the increased pool of students without a need to open new positions. Unless the author substantiates this point it would be no more than a wishful thinking that number of teaching jobs has to be increased.
Third, the author has mentioned that those who passed from the Waymarsh University particularly had a hard time finding jobs. This may be because of some shortcomings of the curriculum of the University to prepare its students perfect fit for the education job market. If that is true, we cannot simply assume that the next decade will bring great news for the job seekers from Waymarsh University, even if a huge number of jobs are going to be added.
The above shortcomings and unsupported claims make the argument weaker than expected at the first glance and definitely throws a reader in a position of dilemma. The claim can be made more logical and, of course, believable by substantiating the assumptions with proper data and evidences.
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The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh city newspaper:
Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next 10 years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
My response:
In the newspaper article above the author has presented an argument that claims that in the coming decade he expects a number of jobs to be added in the field of college education. The evidence he presented is that there is a pool of candidates who will reach the age of college education in the coming 10 years. The claim although looks sound at the first glance has a number of unsubstantiated assumptions as well as lack of justifications that becomes clear once we dive deeper into the matter.
First, the author assumes that for an individual, reaching college age inevitably leads to get admitted in college without any data regarding the rate of admission among the eligible candidates in the Waymarsh city. What if the rate of college admission that has been recorded in the past decades stands merely at 25% and shows a declining trend, which can be expected form a not so promising job market. Definitely, we can not expect a huge number of students to admit in colleges in the coming decade.
Second, there may be other reasons to the dearth of college education jobs in Waymarsh city, such as, a huge pool of accomplished teachers have already been employed in such positions. Now, even if there is an increase in number of students, may be, already established teachers will be able to handle the increased pool of students without a need to open new positions. Unless the author substantiates this point it would be no more than a wishful thinking that number of teaching jobs has to be increased.
Third, the author has mentioned that those who passed from the Waymarsh University particularly had a hard time finding jobs. This may be because of some shortcomings of the curriculum of the University to prepare its students perfect fit for the education job market. If that is true, we cannot simply assume that the next decade will bring great news for the job seekers from Waymarsh University, even if a huge number of jobs are going to be added.
The above shortcomings and unsupported claims make the argument weaker than expected at the first glance and definitely throws a reader in a position of dilemma. The claim can be made more logical and, of course, believable by substantiating the assumptions with proper data and evidences.
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